Elena raised her face, soggy and wrinkled, from the cushion
sustaining her brief nap.
Ten years whooshed past.
Once she sat up, all pins and needles, they thumped back down
in her lap.
33 words for 
including at least one example of onomatopoeia.
including at least one example of onomatopoeia.
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Great shot of reality Kymm.
ReplyDeleteSometimes my reality is just too real. Thanks, Sam!
DeleteYeah, way to keep it real, yo. Great last part.
ReplyDeleteHaha. Stupid reality. Thanks, Lance!
DeleteBoom! That's a heavy load...well done!
ReplyDeleteHa! Heavier and heavier. Thanks, Maggie!
DeleteThat was quite a nap.
ReplyDeleteYou would think so, wouldn't you? Thanks for reading, Ann!
DeleteI've woken up from an errant couch nap before and thought "Wait a minute. What the heck happened?" love the last part and the relatable feeling.
ReplyDeleteExactly! Glad you could relate. Thanks, Gina!
DeleteSome sort of fugue or coma? Or something more symbolic? Either way, great piece!
ReplyDeleteDraug, Draug, Draug. Sometimes I forget how young you are!
DeleteThanks for trying to get me anyway!
I hate the pins and needles feeling, but even more, I hate it when unwelcome reality comes crashing back. Loved this one, Kymm!
ReplyDeleteYeah, pins and needles go away. Unwelcome reality not so much. Thanks for the love, Valerie!
DeleteAmazing amount of story in 33 words and great use of onomatopoeia. Nicely done and congrats on the win.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for those kind words, lumdog!
DeleteWhen reality comes back - that's worse than the pins and needles!
ReplyDeleteYou know it! Thanks, Janna!
DeleteKymm, this is just wonderful. Of course I want to know more. There's a lot going on around that nap.
ReplyDeleteTen years worth... Thank you so much, Linda!
Deleteyouch - hate those pins & needles - someone really should clean them up!
ReplyDeleteHahaha. Someone else, though. Thanks, Jody!
DeleteI hate whooshing years! Move way too fast for my liking. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThey just keep whooshing faster and faster, don't they? Thanks, Tina!
Delete"Soggy and wrinkled" God, I know that feeling. Would it were that naps actually let us sleep the years away.
ReplyDeleteWouldn't that be wonderful?! On the other hand, they do. Thanks for reading, Jennifer!
DeleteThe weight of years - so miserable and heavy.
ReplyDeleteWeightier and weightier, yup. Thanks for reading, Sarah!
Deletethat was exactly the feeling I got, feeling the weight of years along with your character. well done!
DeleteThank you, Jenna. And thanks for the visit.
DeleteWhat a nap---and whoosh.
ReplyDeleteI never was much of a nap person myself. Thanks for reading, Björn!
DeleteLove the way the pins & needles brings her back to reality:-)Excellent piece Kymm and congrats on your awesome win last week:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Atreyee! For your encouragement and congrats.
DeleteLove that last line Kymm (especially the pins and needles bit)! I can so relate to this. Great job with the prompt!
ReplyDeleteNot sure if I should be glad or sorry you can relate - haha. Thanks for the love, Suzanne!
DeleteThank you, yarnspinnerr!
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