She languished in his arms, her eyes sparkling. With tender lips, whispered yearnings, he spoke her name. Her sighs choked to a gasp as he rose to leave. “My wife will be waiting.”
33 words for 
about love gone wrong. But none of them are: love, sad, tears, wept, heart or pain.
about love gone wrong. But none of them are: love, sad, tears, wept, heart or pain.
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You've captured well the hurt and angst of loving someone you cannot have...
ReplyDeleteThat's lovely to hear. Thank you, Rebecca!
DeleteDump him!
ReplyDeleteNice work
Ally :)
Dumping will happen... lol Thank you, Ally!!
DeleteWhat a prick... two people deceived... he deserve loneliness
ReplyDeleteFish gotta swim, bird gotta fly... Thanks for your indignation, Björn!
DeleteBjorn's comment made me chuckle. Loneliness would be just, though :)
ReplyDeleteHaha Loneliness won't be his lot, I'm afraid, but probably hers. Thanks, Janna!
DeleteOuch. Too close to home, but still, Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteI'm always too close to home for my own good, but sorry this one's close to yours : (
DeleteStill, thank you very much, Troy!
Beautiful! The pain is so raw and evident here.
ReplyDeleteAnd it's only just begun... Thank you, Yeshasvi!
DeleteThose pesky wives, so needy.
ReplyDeleteHahaha Right??? They've already got their latex gloves, what more do they want!?
DeleteOh Tara that made me laugh this morning.
DeleteTotally deserves to be dumped by both! Very well-crafted Kymm. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteDeserving, maybe, but it so rarely happens that way. You are very kind, thank you, SD!
DeleteSounds like a man who gets pleasure from having his cake and eating it too. Nice story.
ReplyDeleteHaha If that were the case, who wouldn't??
DeleteThank you, Michelle!
Ah...such a gentle scene, at first. And then...the sudden, jarring mention of the wife. Is this where she learns about the wife, I wonder?
ReplyDeleteThat's exactly how it's supposed to feel, Kelly. You're right on target : )
DeleteI loved the twist in this tale Kymm. The sudden jolt from passion to deceit.
ReplyDeleteSo glad the jolting works. Thanks for the love, Mike!
DeleteThis is a gem, Kymm, and it proves the old adage that honesty is the best policy. (And honesty after sex is even better-or at least smarter.) ;) Once again, you never disappoint!
ReplyDeleteFunny you should say that, Valerie. I used to want honesty up front. Now I'd just as soon the sex came first, then let the honesty kick in if it must.
DeleteIt makes me exceedingly happy to not disappoint you. Thank you, sweetie!
Gets my vote for 'languished'. Bloody love that word! Great ending, Kymm! Don't forget to come back and vote!
ReplyDeleteWell, Tri, you take away all those words, and we need to get our fix!
DeleteThank you for your kind words : )
Oh, oh! I'm a sucker for the word "languished", too. The ending was a shocker even though I knew bad stuff was supposed to happen! Greta job, kymm.
ReplyDeleteAnd I'm a sucker for such enthusiastic comments. Thank you, Gina!!
DeleteLove the set up of the scene...but what a heat break. That deceiver deserves whatever happens once those two women get together. Good one Kymm!
ReplyDeleteDon't know that those two even live in the same universe... Thanks for the love, Glynis!
DeleteThat last line cut deep after the first sentence set up such a loving scene. Ouch!
ReplyDeleteDon't mean to hurt anyone, but loving that it cuts deep. Thank you, Tina!!
DeleteGuy's a jerk. Hope she dumps him. Funny thing is, you managed to make me care in 33 words. Wow. Well done.
ReplyDeleteGives me shivers to hear that. Thank you, Garrison!!
DeleteOh, I love disarming! Haha, yes a hindrance. Thanks for your passion, Renada!
ReplyDeleteYou made me want so much to believe everything would be perfect between them, but I knew the outcome would be pain. Achingly sad but wonderful writing.
ReplyDeleteI'm so pleased to hear that. It was just that feeling I was after. Thank you, Lisa!
DeleteWhat a complete ass!!! OMG! His wife???? That is one clever write ma'am. Well done!!!
ReplyDeleteHaha So glad you got caught up in the story. Thanks, Kathy!
DeleteOuch. Nicely done!
ReplyDelete(Sorry!) lol Thanks, Jennifer!
DeleteOh, I liked where this was heading. I knew something would screw it up, though (no pun intended). After all, love had to go wrong this week. :) Let's hope the wife gets a facebook message, phone call or email from his other woman. That would serve him right!
ReplyDeleteWonderful storytelling in just 33 words.
lol Something always screws it up, eh? But I think the wife always ever knows.
DeleteThank you for your kind words, Ivy!
Wonderful beginning!!! Wasn't expecting the ending. Talk about love going way wrong. Great take.
ReplyDeleteHaha Yeah, I had a real handle on this prompt... Thank you so much, Donetta!
DeleteI love this, Kymm. Her sighs choked to a gasp. Damn, I know that kind of moment and you captured it so perfectly. Plus reading the comment thread here was a great way to start my morning. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm really glad that moment came through. And pleased you enjoyed the thread, too. Thanks so much for the love, Momo!
DeleteWhat a bastard. At least I take it, from her chokes and gasps, that she didn't know. I admire how you move from so loving and tender to shocks and endings so fluidly.
ReplyDeleteNaw, she didn't know. Prolly coulda, but didn't. It's so nice to hear it moves smoothly : ) Thank you, Sarah!
DeleteWhat an ending! Great job!
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it. Thank you so much, Ashley!
DeleteI agree about the ending. It was great. I was impressed with your writing. In just a few words, you captured the horror of discovering a truth about someone you care for.
ReplyDeleteI don't why I thought of this, but a long time ago, I used an online dating site. To my dismay so did a lot of men who were not really free to date. It wasn't fun when they came calling and you had to learn to watch out for them!
This was a very good read. Thanks!
I always suspected that about online dating. Good to know.
DeleteThank you so much for your kind words, Sara! I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
33 words packed with meaning and emotion
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Marc!
DeleteThat has to hurt!
ReplyDeleteLike a bitch, Draug!
DeleteTears before bedtime for sure.
ReplyDeleteYou have a lot of story packed into those few words Kymm.
Hmmm tears before and after bedtime?
DeleteThank you so much, Steve!
Gah! Schmuck. This piece definitely provoked a reaction! Totally got my dander up. :) Nice job.
ReplyDeleteSorry to get your dander up. Not really, though. Kinda psyched : ) Thanks, Christine!
DeleteA poor excuse of a man-hope she kicked his butt to way beyond!! Excellent writing Kymm-loved it :-)
ReplyDeleteHa! You would have had her pulling a switchblade out of her purse, I bet. Thanks for the love, Atreyee!
DeleteWife and girlfriend should both dump him.
ReplyDeleteThe should, probably, but they rarely do. Thanks for visiting, Sonia!
DeleteThat is wrong! nicely done
ReplyDeleteHa! Wrong? Yes. Uncommon? Not so much. Thanks so much, MTO!
DeleteWell crafted. Strong sentence structure and clear word choice brought about a powerful image. With a damn good twist.
ReplyDeleteI'm so pleased you think so. Thank you very much, TT!!
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