The first time I saw
the sea, I knew what it was
to drown. Held fast by
a line from the bow
of a sleek ship, the sky like
glass. Dunked in the waves.
Breath
turned to salt.
33 words added on to
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'13 Untitled (Sally) 51,668;
'12 Barcelona Clash 51,878;
'11 Mojo Madness 52,793;
'10 Changing Directions 53,400;
'09 Daybreak 56,565;
'08 Vacant 52,486
You so often take my breath away... this is no exception.. awesome write!
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely thing to say, Steph. Thank you!
Deleteoh, the dangerous sea...nicely done! ☺
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sun!
DeleteWow - What a write. This is really beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI have to admit I love your 'wow'. Thank you so much, Kelly. I am glad it spoke to you.
DeleteOh yes, Kymm. This is stunning perfection.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely thing to hear from my favorite pirate : )
DeleteThank you, Valerie!
I feel this way every time to go to see the ocean. It is mesmerizing.
ReplyDeleteIsn't it fascinating how the water seems like a part of you? Such a powerful force.
DeleteGlad to share your feels, Tara!
This flowed right over me. The water takes my breath away. Beautiful, kymm!
ReplyDeleteThat's so nice to hear, Gina. Thank you!
DeleteThe sea is so vast and powerful - I fear it and respect it's strength.
ReplyDeleteFirst lesson I taught my kids: respect that sucker. Awesome in its beauty and its blind power.
DeleteThanks, Janna!
I love it! Great work.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Margit!
DeleteThe ocean is the keeper of mysteries. Beautiful work!!
ReplyDeleteHa, yes, the keeper of many things.
DeleteThank you, Tina!!
Swoon. I love this. The ocean is my favorite metaphor.
ReplyDeleteI love when you swoon : )
DeleteThanks for the love, Tri!
"Breath turned to salt", Wow! Extraordinarily-good work, Kymm. Lots of folks seem to be tang their craft to higher levels this week and, this piece is no exception! Great imagery and word choice from start to finish. Simply excellent! :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with you, Tom, that this prompt seemed to inspire some terrific posts.
DeleteThank you so much for your kind words!
Gorgeous writing, particularly that last line. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Jess!
DeleteGood to see you around here:)
A beautiful piece of writing Kymm. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThat's so nice to hear. Thank you, Mike!
DeleteThe open water always manages to intrigue while also terrifying me. It's a complicated emotion.
ReplyDeleteComplicated, you said it. Thanks for the visit, ODNT!
DeletePowerful! I thought I was reading someone's past life regression!
ReplyDeleteHaha Maybe you were, Kristin, maybe you were! Thank you.
DeleteOh, very lyrical and lovely. Inspiring as always.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you find it inspiring, Spencer. Thank you!
DeleteAlways!
DeleteBeautiful! I love the ocean. Miss it daily.
ReplyDeleteI missed it so much I came chasing after the sea...
DeleteThank you so much, Mel!
Kymm, I can feel the salty air on my lips now. Poetry, beautifully realized. :)))
ReplyDeleteGlad to share the salt with you! Thanks so much, Jo-Anne!
Delete1st sentence will stick with me for a few years. Or more.
ReplyDelete(Psst. This one was not the hyperbole prompt.)
DeleteThat is a truly lovely thing to say, Jan. Thank you!
Each word beautifully chosen!
ReplyDeleteI thank you kindly, Grace!
DeleteI know this feeling!
ReplyDeleteHappy to share feelings. Thanks, Michael!
DeleteLove this, Kymm. The sky like glass. Breath turned to salt. Every bit of this is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSo glad to hear. Thanks for the love, Momo!
DeleteThis is wonderful work.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Draug!
DeleteSo gorgeous, Kymm! I love the ocean and that last line is perfection. <3
ReplyDeleteThanks for the love, Suzanne!
Deletethis is so sad.. actually I wrote a 100 word story on almost exactly the same subject. Beautiful and sad.
ReplyDeleteIs it sad? I'd love to read your story, if you'll leave a link. Thanks, Björn!
DeleteThat last line ... wowzers! Excellent work, my friend!
ReplyDeleteHey, Ivy! Thanks so much!
DeleteKymm for the win (well, I guess technically second place, but you deserved the win for this one, in my humble opinion)! Yay! I knew it! Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteYay! Awesome. Thank you, Spencer! You're making me blush, though : )
DeleteAbsolutely stunning.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations!
So glad you think so. Thank you, De!
DeleteYour first line blew me away! Oh, and the last one too.
ReplyDeleteTed!! Happy to have blown you away, bud. Thank you!
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