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Monday, January 13, 2014

Sink or Swim

The first time I saw
the sea, I knew what it was
to drown. Held fast by

a line from the bow
of a sleek ship, the sky like
glass. Dunked in the waves.

Breath
turned to salt.

33 words added on to's original five: The first time I saw...

Tickled to be awarded silver for Trifextra 100 :)

59 comments:

  1. You so often take my breath away... this is no exception.. awesome write!

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    1. What a lovely thing to say, Steph. Thank you!

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  2. oh, the dangerous sea...nicely done! ☺

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  3. Wow - What a write. This is really beautiful.

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    1. I have to admit I love your 'wow'. Thank you so much, Kelly. I am glad it spoke to you.

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  4. Oh yes, Kymm. This is stunning perfection.

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    1. What a lovely thing to hear from my favorite pirate : )
      Thank you, Valerie!

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  5. I feel this way every time to go to see the ocean. It is mesmerizing.

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    1. Isn't it fascinating how the water seems like a part of you? Such a powerful force.
      Glad to share your feels, Tara!

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  6. This flowed right over me. The water takes my breath away. Beautiful, kymm!

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    1. That's so nice to hear, Gina. Thank you!

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  7. The sea is so vast and powerful - I fear it and respect it's strength.

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    1. First lesson I taught my kids: respect that sucker. Awesome in its beauty and its blind power.
      Thanks, Janna!

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  8. The ocean is the keeper of mysteries. Beautiful work!!

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    1. Ha, yes, the keeper of many things.
      Thank you, Tina!!

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  9. Swoon. I love this. The ocean is my favorite metaphor.

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    1. I love when you swoon : )
      Thanks for the love, Tri!

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  10. "Breath turned to salt", Wow! Extraordinarily-good work, Kymm. Lots of folks seem to be tang their craft to higher levels this week and, this piece is no exception! Great imagery and word choice from start to finish. Simply excellent! :)

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    1. I agree with you, Tom, that this prompt seemed to inspire some terrific posts.
      Thank you so much for your kind words!

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  11. Gorgeous writing, particularly that last line. :)

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    1. Thank you so much, Jess!
      Good to see you around here:)

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  12. A beautiful piece of writing Kymm. Well done.

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    1. That's so nice to hear. Thank you, Mike!

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  13. The open water always manages to intrigue while also terrifying me. It's a complicated emotion.

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    1. Complicated, you said it. Thanks for the visit, ODNT!

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  14. Powerful! I thought I was reading someone's past life regression!

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    1. Haha Maybe you were, Kristin, maybe you were! Thank you.

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  15. Oh, very lyrical and lovely. Inspiring as always.

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  16. Beautiful! I love the ocean. Miss it daily.

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    1. I missed it so much I came chasing after the sea...
      Thank you so much, Mel!

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  17. Kymm, I can feel the salty air on my lips now. Poetry, beautifully realized. :)))

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    1. Glad to share the salt with you! Thanks so much, Jo-Anne!

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  18. 1st sentence will stick with me for a few years. Or more.

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    1. (Psst. This one was not the hyperbole prompt.)
      That is a truly lovely thing to say, Jan. Thank you!

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    1. Happy to share feelings. Thanks, Michael!

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  20. Love this, Kymm. The sky like glass. Breath turned to salt. Every bit of this is beautiful.

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    1. So glad to hear. Thanks for the love, Momo!

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  21. So gorgeous, Kymm! I love the ocean and that last line is perfection. <3

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  22. this is so sad.. actually I wrote a 100 word story on almost exactly the same subject. Beautiful and sad.

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    1. Is it sad? I'd love to read your story, if you'll leave a link. Thanks, Björn!

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  23. That last line ... wowzers! Excellent work, my friend!

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  24. Kymm for the win (well, I guess technically second place, but you deserved the win for this one, in my humble opinion)! Yay! I knew it! Congratulations!

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    1. Yay! Awesome. Thank you, Spencer! You're making me blush, though : )

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  25. Absolutely stunning.
    Congratulations!

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    1. So glad you think so. Thank you, De!

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  26. Your first line blew me away! Oh, and the last one too.

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    1. Ted!! Happy to have blown you away, bud. Thank you!

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