Retribution
Charts and optimal
dates and preferential temperatures. One line or two. As if she could summon
whatever it is that makes up the human soul as easily as she could a cab on a
busy New York avenue.
She faced the window.
Her eyes saw infinite explication.
Her math books only examined the probability of tangibility. What of transcendence?
Yellow streaks formed cabs.
An anxious, veneer hand waved.
If it were a finite equation, the curves that lined the hand and body to the point of the nose would be defined by x and y. There would be no question of why two and two is four....
The cocoa swallowed the nutmeg's taste.
The heat rolled into the vents.
The hot chocolate she drank would taste no different to the student three seats over sipping the same.
As if she
could banish the specter of truncated possibility; knock it back like some pill
taken for the after effects. One cycle or two? Suck it up, spit it out, let it
bleed. Expiation.
i love how you ended it. your choices of words were fantastic. love it ;D
ReplyDelete:) Your lead got me there, teammate. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteVery elegant response! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy!
ReplyDeleteVery poetic, Kymm. But I fear you might be too smart for me. I am, in fact, a peasant. Enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThanks ODNT, but I'm not too smart for you, maybe just too cryptic. Enjoyment is good.
DeleteI like the similarity to the original prompt in the second half. The whole thing is lovely!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Draug. Glad you liked it.
DeleteThis flowed so well, I had to look at Renada's to find out where she left off. Nice job on this!
ReplyDeleteSweet! Thank you, Janna.
DeleteThis is really, really pretty writing. I enjoyed both parts so much. Thanks for linking up and helping us celebrate our first year.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I loved participating in this - and thank you for randomly throwing Renada my way!
DeleteBeautifully written poetry. The two pieces fit together perfectly.
ReplyDeleteThank you, lumdog. The tricky part is getting them to mesh, isn't it?
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent! You did a great job tying it all together. I'm not sure if you wanted your character to come off this way but I could almost feel her bitterness.
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent! You did a great job tying it all together. I'm not sure if you wanted your character to come off this way but I could almost feel her bitterness.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rachael. Bitterness was part of the equation, yeah.
DeleteCongratulations on the win. This was beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteHuh? Thanks Tara.
Deletebooyah! thank you teammate! ;D
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