Having undressed in hurried, solitary passion, he
sat before her, his fingers splayed in expectation. She tried to disguise the look
of disgust that ravished her face, so picked at a nebulous piece of lint,
feeling overdressed.
“What’s wrong?” he asked, his naked
plea a demand.
The challenge is to write a complete story in only three sentences.
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Yikes. One if those "I need to disappear" moments. Cringe:-) (rogri)
ReplyDeleteHaha One of those "everybody needs to disappear" moments. Sorry for the cringe.
DeleteThanks for reading, Rogri!
Oh, poor guy. Too bad you didn't have a fourth sentence for her response.
ReplyDeleteI don't think another sentence would have helped anyone... Thanks for reading, Tara!
DeleteWow. You packed a lot of story in three sentences. But you cleverly left a lot of questions unanswered. Please write more.
ReplyDeleteHaha I'm sure I will. Thanks so much, lumdog!
DeleteI really want to know what's going on between these two. This is such a good start to something more!
ReplyDeleteNah, you don't wanna know. Really. Believe me. Hehe.
DeleteThanks, Draug!
Oh, I hate having to make a naked plea! :)
ReplyDeleteDon't you just??!!
DeleteThanks, Tom, and glad to see you back!
Hurried, solitary passion says so much Kymm! What a scenario! This piece is very good!!
ReplyDeleteHurried, solitary passion. Sounds different out there on its own. lol
DeleteThanks so much, Valerie!
Ooh, that's a little awkward! Naked pleas rarely end well...especially if the other person is not naked :)
ReplyDeleteI find naked and awkward go together often. lol
DeleteThanks for reading, Janna!
Oops... that's why darkness is needed sometimes
ReplyDeleteLike a sudden blackout? lol Your oops is kinda funny.
DeleteThanks for reading, Björn!
Ooh, this is really good. So intense.
ReplyDeleteGlad you think so. Thank you, Christi!
DeleteOuch! Poor guy. Poor girl. Not a fun position for either of them. Great job capturing the discomfort of that moment. Wonderful story Kymm!
ReplyDeleteYeah, kind of a lose-lose situation... Thanks so much, Suzanne!
DeleteAs I read this all I could think of was thank God I've never experienced such a discomforting scene. Sounds dreadful! When you engage a reader so intimately (pardon the pun), you know it was a good piece of writing....
ReplyDeleteHahaha Love the pun! Sorry for the discomfort, though.
DeleteThank you for rocking the comments today, Rebecca! : )
'She tried to disguise the look of disgust that ravished her face,..' I bet she struggled. This was a wonderful description of a sad tale.
ReplyDeleteWell, you don't want to be more cruel than necessary...
DeleteThank you, Sarah!
Totally believable story. For some reason, the picking at the lint truly made me see this.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you said so. I wanted the lint to "dress" her.
DeleteThank you, Sara!
I felt awkward just reading this! Well done!
ReplyDeleteBetter to feel awkward reading than doing, I hope! Thank you, Dayle!
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