She sits as his last breath rises. His soul, energy, life-force hovers goodbye. No, she says. Rising, it disperses, turning into universe. No, she cries, how will I know you? Out near another galaxy it flinches. Gathers. Returns. Reenters her atmosphere. Ignites.
'13 Untitled (Sally) 51,668;
'12 Barcelona Clash 51,878;
'11 Mojo Madness 52,793;
'10 Changing Directions 53,400;
'09 Daybreak 56,565;
'08 Vacant 52,486
Stunner. In just 42 words, you accomplished a lot.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Ruby!
DeleteThat was gripping!
ReplyDeleteOh, great to hear that. Thank you, Candace!
DeleteYou gave me chills! Good writing.
ReplyDeleteMusic to my ears, Susan, thank you!
DeleteWOW...amazing 42 words.
ReplyDeleteI love a wow. Thank you, Kathy!
DeleteYou are such a gifted writer, taking me out into the universe and just amazing me.
ReplyDeleteTina, you have made my day. Thank you!
DeleteAlso: To infinity, and beyond!
Amazing Kymm! I was taken away, love this ....."Reenters her atmosphere...ignites"
ReplyDeleteSo nice to hear that. Thank you, Glynis!
DeleteWhere's the love button?! Such a great story in just 42 words. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI had to read that three times, Arden, how sad is that. I want a love button!!!
DeleteThank you so much for your kind words : )
This was so beautiful, and as others have said, there is so much here! I love that last image.
ReplyDeleteOh! Thank you for the love, SL!
DeleteGreat to hear, Renada, thank you!
ReplyDeleteOoo, a sci-fi love story. Or maybe heaven is light years away? Or maybe this is the moment the narrator becomes a soothsayer. So many possibilities. When I get home, I want to try to draw pictures of souls hovering goodbye. What does that look like?
ReplyDeleteHehe Please link me to your pictures, Nate!
DeleteI love this, Kymm, and where it takes my imagination. "...turning into universe" = super
ReplyDeleteIt's such a pleasure to hear that. Thanks for the love, Jennifer!
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