Do you want to go make a snowman?
I’m playing
with my dolly.
Get your thumb
out of your mouth. Dolly will be here when we get back. Here, put on the snow
pants Nana got you.
They’re
ugly
They’ll
keep you warm and dry. We’ll make an igloo. A fort. Have a snowball fight.
“WHO WANTS
TO COME MAKE A SNOWMAN WITH US?”
Mommy don’t yell, you hurt my ear.
Here, put
this hat on.
That hat is
ugly.
It’s warm,
put it on. Boots, gloves, jacket. Good. Let’s go.
***
Nana, are
you coming with us?
We’re
taking the dogs out for a walk, pumpkin.
What dogs?
Muffin?
Yes, Muffin.
And Aunt Susan’s dog Noodles. And Uncle Gerald’s dog Chief. Wouldn’t you like
to come for a walk with us?
Mum, why
don’t you all come and help us build a snowman.
TIME FOR
WALKIES!! Muffin! Noodles! Chief! Oh ho ho, what good doggies. Come, come. Gerald!
Susan! Goodbye dear. Sure you won’t come?
***
Mommy, it’s
cold out here!
Yes,
sweetie, it’s very cold. Help me dig and you’ll warm up. Look, the mouth of the
tunnel is almost as tall as you are. You’ll have to crawl, though. I don’t want
the roof to cave in.
My mittens
are wet. I don’t want to crawl. Where are the doggies?
The doggies
are on their walkies with their mummies and daddies. You and I are building you
a snow cave. Go in, see if you fit.
My cheeks
hurt. Mommy, do your cheeks hurt?
No.
Mommy.
Just about
done. Can you get in there?
I’m cold,
Mommy. My mittens are wet.
There, you
look so cute. Where’s the camera?
Oh! Doggies
barking! Mommy!
Yes, of course.
The camera is with the dogs.
Mommy! My
nose hurts!
Okay. Let’s
go get some hot cocoa.
And some
for the doggies?
No. None
for the doggies.
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Cute story. She is the exact opposite of my kids. I say lets play in the snow and they would jump to wear burlap sacks on their heads if I asked. They also won't complain about being cold, I've found because they are afraid I might make them come inside. Little polar bears, the two of them. Thanks for the good read :)
ReplyDeleteThat would have been me, tenword, but no my kids. Barcelona doesn't prepare you for playing in the snow! Thanks for reading!
DeleteI love this. Nice story!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you love it, Deana. Thanks!
DeleteAwww.. Such a cute interaction between the mother and daughter..:-) The daughter's reluctance and mother's insistence nicely portrayed. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteIt's a pull-tight and loosen-up game, as they say in Spain. Thanks muZer.
DeleteSweet story. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sandra.
DeleteLove the way you've written this piece Kymm. The mother's frustration with her own mother comes through beautifully - and her interaction with her daughter is fantastic. Great story!
ReplyDelete*sigh* I was beginning to wonder if it came through at all. Thank you so much, Suzanne!
Deletecute tale (or should I say tail? where are the doggies?). You wrote it as though you were living it that very moment.
ReplyDeleteHa ha. Feels like it (the moment) sometimes. Thanks, Jody.
DeleteGenerations of frustrating fun! I enjoyed the fast clip that this moves along. I found the interaction between mom and daughter - both of them - touching - and real.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Steph. We're all cute when we're small...
DeleteI loved this - my grands are snow bunnies . . . can hardly keep them out of the stuff. Good thng we get a lot. :)
ReplyDeleteGood thing you like it! Thanks, Barbara.
DeleteNice story! I wonder why all the dogs were named after eatables :-P
ReplyDeleteThanks, Habiba! [variations on a theme, but only 2 of 3]
DeleteThe last part of the story filled me with sadness and I'm so very happy that your characters managed to crawl out of the tunnel and go get some cocoa!
ReplyDeletePrefer you be happy than sad, but cocoa ftw!
DeleteOh, the challenges of the indoor kid! I'm sure it's character building if cold.
ReplyDeleteMore a Mediterranean kid than an indoor kid, but still character building. Thanks for reading, Annabelle!
DeleteVery understanable and related reactions na dialogue. Way to hit the right emo notes, with this, Kymm.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lance. That's really nice to hear!
DeleteI always wanted to build the snow fort. Now, the grandkids would love to, but I'm a little slower to join in. And the snow is less now than when I was young.
ReplyDeletealmost sounds like I want to join, hmmmm
It's always less than when we were young, Renee!
DeleteThe mother seemed more like the kid than the kid wanted to be (: Cute story.
ReplyDeleteTrying to pass on traditions isn't always as easy as it looks... Thanks, Draug.
DeleteThis was a cute scene. I got a little nervous when she climbed in the cave, but I'm glad all was well and she was destined for hot chocolate :)
ReplyDeleteYeah, lucky she got out before the dogs got back. Thanks, Janna!
DeleteCute!
ReplyDeleteDidn´t realize I could do cute! Thanks, Joe.
DeleteVery cute and real story. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteThanks, lumdog. It's the doggies, isn't it?
DeleteThis is weirdly frightening.
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear that. Thanks for reading, Tony.
DeleteI was getting worried about that snow cave with the child in there-heaved a sigh of relief when everything turned to that hot cup of cocoa:-)Loved how you brought the scene alive with your words
ReplyDeleteKymm:-)
Thank you, Atreyee! You really don't need to worry about snow caves. It's not like there would be an avalanche or anything. The roof falls in and your cave is wrecked, that's all. Running out of hot cocoa would be a tragedy, however.
DeleteThis felt very original and authentic to me, and I enjoyed this story-telling approach of all dialogue. Did I mention there is snow outside my window?
ReplyDeleteThank you for making me feel welcome on my first Trifecta post.
Thank you, Tina. Glad you enjoyed it. Sorry for your snow.
DeleteAnd you're welcome. Trifecta is a welcoming kinda place.
I always send mine out into the snow with the dogs. No cold toes for me!
ReplyDelete: ) No dogs. No snow. Thanks for reading, Cameron!
DeleteWe have no snow here. Nada. I am jealous!
ReplyDeleteNo snow here, either! Thanks for reading, Tina.
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