All the things that had been his and were now hers settle
like deadweight on her chest. She waits for the clouds to lift them off, beguile
her with puppy dogs and dragons.
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I love this poem and a very clever response to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteLove is good! Thanks, lumdog.
DeletePuppy dogs and Dragons! What an interesting proposition!
ReplyDeleteWell. Clouds. You know? Thanks for reading, Joe.
DeletePuppy dogs and dragons is a winning combination. I think it would make a good sugary cereal! :D Excellent take.
ReplyDeleteLucky Charms? Thank you, Linda!
Deletethis one hurt. I felt those things settle on my own chest.
ReplyDeleteIf only puppies and dragons could take away that kind of pain.
You move me.
Yeah, if only anything could take it away.
DeleteIs there a greater compliment than that I move you, Kir? Wow. Thank you.
Aw... Emily wants to come in and wrangle some more clouds into happy shapes, but she respectfully maintains the dignity of the scene.
ReplyDeleteHappy shapes would be excellent, Dawn, but, sadly, not from Emily... But thanks for the offer (and props on your place!!).
DeleteA cloud with some silver lining in the shape of puppy dogs & dragons(cute yet dangerous?).An interesting read Kymm-liked it very much:-)
ReplyDeleteYeah, the entire spectrum of clouds. Thanks Atreyee!
DeleteDeadweight on her chest.......puppy dogs and dragons........lots of good imagery in this piece. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Tom.
Deletenicely done - heart wrenching
ReplyDeleteSorry to wrench... but thanks, Barbara.
DeleteHer pain comes through very well. If only puppy dogs and dragons could make it all better.
ReplyDeleteOh, if only! Thanks, Janna.
DeleteSuch poignant lines and effective usage of words.. Love this line.. beguile her with Puppy dogs and dragons
ReplyDeleteLove is good! Thanks you, muZer.
Deleteah, a good cloud watching session always lifts the spirits! :)
ReplyDeleteDoesn't it, though! Thanks, Jody.
DeleteThis is very nice. I never see dragons in clouds. Only weird noses (:
ReplyDeleteI would have thought you would see dragons everywhere, Draug! (Thanks!)
DeleteThis is such a lovely piece Kymm. Beautiful use of the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Suzanne!
DeleteI felt this weight. Love to daydream in clouds but never see puppies and dragons.
ReplyDeleteYes, that weight. You'd be surprised what I see in the clouds... Thanks for reading, Gina.
DeleteI have seen dragons in the clouds, and they are beautiful. This was great.
ReplyDeleteSome are beautiful, some terrifying. Thank you, Tina.
DeleteThis poem is really touching!
ReplyDeleteAlways pleased to touch, Deana. Thank you.
DeleteAww, makes me sad for her. Nice work. And it love the combination of puppy dogs and dragons. Creative.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Steph!
Deletenice
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DeleteThis is very nicely written and touching also!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Donetta!
DeleteHope she feels better soon! Puppies and dragons are the thing these days, huh?:D
ReplyDeleteThank you, dd. One day puppies and dragons, the next cirrus and cumulus...
DeleteThe weight of "things". Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteYeah, all those "things". Thanks, Renee.
DeleteBeguile is one of the great all-time words isn't it? Lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteIt's a good one. Thanks, Lance!
ReplyDeleteHeavy and beautiful
ReplyDeleteLighter and lighter. Thanks, Darcy.
DeleteI love this!
ReplyDeleteSo glad to hear that. Thank you, Kim.
DeleteSo much sadness. Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteSorry for the sad, but thank you, Christine!
DeleteI know this feeling, I loved the lighthearted ending.
ReplyDeleteSorry you know it, but glad for the light heart. Thanks, Amelia. (btw, you have my grandmother's name! <3)
DeleteA nice image of pictures in the sky.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ted.
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