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Tuesday, April 16, 2013

Friend in Deed

She tossed her purse and broken sandals over the fence, heard them land on the grass. It was an easy lift to the wall. Her toes gripped the cool brick surface and she stepped in delicate balance over the wire mesh, then dropped to the spongy dew-laden ground. She pranced on tiptoes across the small lawn and up the three steps to reach a sliding glass door. She pulled at the handle, making sure it opened before she turned to give a thumbs-up to the red Pinto idling at the curb. The headlights blipped and the car moved away.

The housing complex was dark and silent, as befit the suburban dead of night. Angie slipped into the apartment and felt her slow, careful way to the bedroom. She crouched down to make sure it was Javi’s shoulder she touched. She breathed his name. When he grunted back, she whispered.

‘Mind if I sleep here tonight?’

Javi flung the sheet back over the two boys sprawled between him and his wife. He patted the mattress at his hip.

‘Climb in,’

In the pitch-black bedroom, Angie felt a sudden rush of color burn her cheeks.

‘No, gracias.’ She smiled. “I’ll just crash on the sofa.’

She crept back to the living room and stood looking out over the moonlit garden.

‘Here’s a sheet,’ said Javi behind her, making her jump. She turned to watch him drape it over the couch. When he straightened, she also saw that he was buck naked.

‘That’s okay, Javi, thanks. Get back to sleep.’ She felt the flush return to her face as she sat down and poked at a cushion.

‘You okay?’ Javi asked. ‘What’s going on?’ He reached to squeeze her shoulder.

‘I’m fine. I’ll tell you about it in the morning.’ She glanced back at him, saw his penis drooping before her and waved him off.

‘Sorry about this,’ she said and lay down.

‘No problem.’ Javi yawned and turned to leave. ‘See you in the morning.’
 
 

 
 

44 comments:

  1. It's great what you don't tell us about these two characters. Very interesting details. I'd like to read more of this story. Well done.

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    1. Glad you think so, lumdog, thanks!!

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  2. This sounds complicated! A wife and two kids, and then there's the drooping aspect, as well;) That can't be good...

    I'd like to know more too!

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    1. I was hoping the title would simplify things... Nobody likes drooping, do they? haha
      Thanks for reading, and for your imput, Valerie!

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  3. Interesting details to a intriguing start to a story. It definitely made me want to know more about these characters.

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    1. Hmmmm. I was hoping if you read it enough it would begin to make sense. Maybe I didn't end it enough.
      Thanks for reading, Tara! The comments always help.

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  4. How intriguing can you get? What's going on? Javi asks. Yes, I'd like to know. All those details to decipher. I hope you continue this in another entry.

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    1. Hmmmm. I tried to tie it up. Wish the title and a reread had done the trick. Ah, well, next time!
      Thanks so much for you imput, Steph!

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  5. lol...color me confused about THAT relationship. It kept me interested though!

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    1. hahaha Love that comment. Glad you were interested. Thanks, Maggie!

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  6. Nothing worse than a drooping penis.

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    1. Hahaha I'm not even gonna go there, Sam!!!

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  7. The 'drooping' detail made me color a bit, haha! Like the other commenters, I'm intrigued by their relationship.

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    1. Haha Made Angie color a bit, too... Thanks for reading, and for your imput, Janna!

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  8. Well...that WAS intriguing! Great start!

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    1. Obviously not enough finish! Thanks for reading, Pirate!

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  9. interesting - leaves lots to the imagination

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    1. Maybe too much? Thanks for your imput, Steve!

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  10. The comments here are fantastic.

    I, too, like the way you don't introduce us to the characters other than to plop us right in the middle of it. This is nicely done.

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    1. Aren't the comments great?! I like plopping in the middle. Thanks, Tri!

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  11. This is an interesting flash of what I hope is a larger story!

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    1. It is larger in my head, but wasn't meant to be here. Appreciate your imput. Thanks, Draug!

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  12. How wonderfully awkward for everyone except Javi. I too loved what wasn't said, the implication of all that had happened that night and what might still happen.

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    1. Yup, the awkward was what took me there... Thanks for the love, Jennifer!

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  13. well, you kept me guessing from beginning to end - in a good way, of course

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    1. Haha As long as it's in a good way. Thanks, Jody!

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  14. Well I'm intensely intrigued! More please!!!

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  15. So much to take in here (and to enjoy here)! Nice story!

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    1. So nice of you to say. Thank you, Kristin!

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  16. Wonder what "deed" they both indulged in-like accomplices?;-)Does Angie harbour feelings for Javi,which he is unaware of-being happily married(more like domesticated stupor?)so that even being naked in her presence means nothing to him-more like she is just a "buddy"?Maybe she was trying to get him out of her system-so had been out with another guy & it did not work out-so she crept back to his house in the middle of the night-to find comfort/solace?Lots of possibilities -loved this unusual tale Kymm-looking forward to reading more:-)

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    1. Well, you certainly seem to have got plenty out of this little tale. Does my writer's heart good.
      Thanks so much for your careful reading, Atreyee!

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  17. Very good one! I like the fact that Javi doesn't seem to be bothered walking around naked.

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    1. I don't know why, but I associate it with generous people. Also, complete sense of turf.
      Glad you liked it, and thanks Joe2!

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  18. I agree with Mr. joe2, that was my favorite part, he was all 'sup no big i'm naked with my family, very cosmopolitan ;)

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    1. Yeah, and she's all omg close my eyes, go away. haha Thanks for your input, Shannon!

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  19. I really enjoyed this, her professional wall-climb, Javi and his casual machismo... I also enjoyed the comments. You've twisted us all up!

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    1. Oooooh I think I like getting peeps in a twist.
      So glad you enjoyed both the story and the comments. Thanks, Bianca!

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  20. Interesting. Obviously Javi leads a full and interesting life!

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    1. Either that or he has an easily accessible home. haha
      Thanks, Tina!

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  21. Javi is so cool and unflustered. I would love to read more about these two!

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    1. Isn't he, though. Thanks for your interest, Sarah!

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  22. A little bit of mystery... hmm why would he suggest sleeping between his children and wife? Why does he get a..... well you know... why is she there... that's it Kymm leave us dangling like his p....

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  23. Mystery appears to be my fault. When she asked if she could sleep there, he just opened the covers for her to climb in. I meant it to be a sleepy parental reaction - the kids were already in there.
    Certainly didn't mean to leave anyone dangling...
    Thanks for your visit and comments, Jenny!

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