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Saturday, April 27, 2013

Mano Dura

The prize Janie coveted was a pat on the head. All day long she straightened the papers on Daddy’s off-limits desk into neat piles.
Ta-da! The backhanded blow to her cheek was overkill.
 
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36 comments:

  1. Oh. I feel badly for her. Sad to say, this is a common occurrence.

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    1. The physical abuse is for dramatic effect, but the scenario is inevitable.

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  2. A very common occurrence. My dad wouldn't have backhanded me, but I knew better than to touch his papers! He was one of those bark is worse than his bite people, but I didn't want to get barked at either!

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    1. As I said before, dramatic effect. But the power/emotional struggle remains, even when you just bark.
      Thanks so much for visiting, Dolly!

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  3. You have an acute sense of irony... poor kid

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    1. Ha! But you know that already. Kid getting trained for the world out there...
      Thanks, Sam!

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  4. Well done. I can picture the little girl and angry father.

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  5. Poor little girl! She'll be doomed to spend the rest of her life chasing the dream of fatherly acceptance. It's a credit to your writing that this piece breaks my heart:)

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    1. Well, though, aren't we all thus doomed?
      Thank you for considering it a credit to break your heart. haha
      Seriously, thank you, Valerie!

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  6. Man, didn't expect the harsh ending. Overkill indeed. Poor little thing. Well-written, as always, Kymm!

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    1. Sorry... but I did say overkill... haha Thank you so much, Suzanne!

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  7. Ouch! That kind of a scar runs deep and almost never fully heals. Very unexpected!

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    1. Unexpected, like the reaction. Thanks, Tina!

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  8. Horrid man!Poor little girl,waiting for applause & getting hit instead!Great piece of writing with an unexpectedly unpleasant twist at the end:-)

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    1. Glad it got to you. Thanks, Atreyee!

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    1. Ah Hell, Ted!

      (Thanks for stopping in.)

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  10. D: awww, she was only trying to help!

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    1. Tell that to the father. But, yeah. Thanks, Draug.

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  11. Poor kid. It serves adults well to think as a child and discern motive before doling out punishment. A child's idea of 'help' is often different from ours, but their heart is in the right place.

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    1. And some adults never mature enough to see that. Thanks, Janna!

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    1. Sorry! I like reactions, though. Thanks, Tara!

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  13. Some children crave for the simple things in life and are constantly disappointed.
    A great story.

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    1. Well, don't we all, really. Thank you, Mike!

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  14. Ouch, I flinched. I agree--definitely overkill. For that, I would shove all of those nice piles I made to the floor!

    Thanks for linking up!

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    1. Sorry for the flinching, but thanks for the visit!

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  15. I wanted to thank you for commenting on my entry, Kymm. It's been a long time since I was in Grammar School, and I really was not sure about this. I have corrected, as I hate to be wrong and look the fool. Besos...

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    1. I'm glad it was taken in the spirit it was offered. I'd like to be remembered as helpful, not anally critical. ¡Un abrazo!

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  16. Ouch, that hurt. I liked the use of off-limits in relation to the desk. (This unprovoked attack has left me unsettled - well done!)

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    1. Sorry for the hurt, but I do like reactions. Thank you so much, Sarah!

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  17. Adults, unfortunately, do not think as often as they should. Children, seldom, do things to really aggravate. They are prompted, most often, by a sense of need of praise.
    I missed the linking limit on the post.
    Mine is at https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com
    Scott

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    1. Adults, yeah. Can't live with 'em, can't reproduce without 'em.
      Thanks for the visit and the link, Scott.

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