A crisp,
kick-the-can silhouette glares
in the forefront
of her aquatic mind.
Out of
reach, shadows emerge and
fade like
trick lighting on a stage
edged in wisps
of names, places,
long-ago emotion.
33 words inspired by the photograph.
Photo credit: Bérenger ZYLA
/ Foter.com / CC BY-NC-ND
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this is beautiful, Kymm. I like the pace and the poignant emotions.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Barbara!
DeleteOh lovely! I like the aquatic mind (:
ReplyDeleteYou like the aquatic mind now, from a distance, but just give it another 25 years or so...
DeleteThanks, Draug!
Memories are like that, faded and wispy around the edges.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written!
Most memories, and most of them lately. Thanks, Renee!
Delete"A crisp, kick-the-can silhouette glares.."what a beautifully sharp opening line & ending so softly,like a forgotten footfall!Loved it Kymm.
ReplyDeleteHmm, if I had more words, I'd surely include forgotten footfall. Thank you so much, Atreyee!
DeleteBeautiful. Really felt the memories come and go, and remain just slightly out of reach.
ReplyDeleteHa, just wait a few years. Thank you Sarah!
DeleteGorgeous writing Kymm! I'm always so eager to read your submissions. Love the imagery - especially the idea of trick lighting. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Suzanne! What a lovely thing to say.
DeleteI love this poem. The imagery is wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, lumdog!
Delete"A crisp, kick-the-can silhouette..."
ReplyDeleteLove this wording.
Glad for the love. Thanks, Jess!
DeleteKymm, thanks for the link1 I love the idea of this scene being in someone's mind; things come and go in memories, don't they? "fade like trick lighting on the stage" was, for me, the most potent image. I wish I could have thought of something for that prompt, but I came up dry. You rocked it. Peace, Amy
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Things do come and go in memories. Memories come and go. And go. ha ha
DeleteThanks Amy!
i love the description used!
ReplyDeleteSo glad for the love. Thanks, Renada!
DeleteWisps of memory is such an accurate description. I often feel as though some important information lies just out of sight, a wisp of something, and if only I can grab it, I will remember everything. Of course, there's more wisps where that came from!
ReplyDeleteYes, that thing that's right on the tip of your tongue... And the wisps just get wispier.
DeleteThanks, Tina!
My memory is far more 'whispier' than what it was... I relate and enjoyed ...emotions remain - memories fade.
ReplyDeleteWispier and wispier... Thank you, Rambly!
Deletewell chosen words throughout
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jody!
DeleteVery good poetry
ReplyDeleteThank you, Björn!
Delete"A crisp, kick-the-can silhouette" caught my imagination right from the word go, great work!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Claire!
DeleteVery nice take on the prompt. I like how the words flowed. Very smooth and even with their rhythm.
ReplyDeleteThanks you very much, Ann!
DeleteOut of reach, shadows emerge and fade.....Very interesting thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Banker Chick!
DeleteDream-like. I esp like her 'aquatic mind' and how names, places and long-ago emotion are wisps.. Love it!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the love, Rashmi!
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