Cross-legged on the patio after recess, they sit in a circle and chant: ‘Hell
no, we won’t go!’
Mr. Parker cringes in embarrassment over the sixth-grade
rebellion, loath to remember his brother in the Asian rain.
This time 
want 33 words plus these 3: remember, rain, rebellion.
want 33 words plus these 3: remember, rain, rebellion.
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Oh wow, Kymm. This is fantastic! The contrast is so striking and says so much in those few words.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you like it. Took me all day fiddling with it to decide it worked as it was, more or less.
DeleteThanks so much, Suzanne!
wow! so good.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Barbara!
DeleteWow - what a great, poignant picture you paint here.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Christine!
DeleteYou got my vote. This is absolutely EXCELLENT. Wow. Wonderful. This is my favorite one so far. I really like this one. What imagery, such emotion in so few words. Wow. This is really good.
ReplyDeleteWow, thank you so much, Scriptor. Glad you liked it.
DeletePoignant is a perfect word for this. I love the last line, well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the love, Lance!
DeleteGreat work here
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Ruby!
DeleteExcellent, Kymm. I had to read a few more times... a lot said in those few words... and good use of the three given.
ReplyDeleteThank you, thank you and thank you, Ted!
DeleteThis packs a punch. An important punch. Well done.
ReplyDeleteBut I'm the non-violent type! lol Thanks, Rangewriter!
Deleteas they say less is more....so much more.
ReplyDeleteGlad you think so. Thanks, Rambly!
DeleteExcellent
ReplyDeleteThank you, Björn!
DeleteInteresting. Very thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteGlad to provoke your thoughts. Thanks, Vanessa!
Delete"...his brother in the Asian rain."
ReplyDeletePure eloquence!
And every year at the local Veteran's Day parade, when I see those men, my heart is so full of emotion I feel like it will break.
This was stunning!
Yeah, all wars are sucky, but that one was the suckiest.
DeleteThank you so much, Valerie!
An interesting parallel between the two times...This piece is very good.
ReplyDeleteA bit before your time, Draug! Thank you!
DeleteWow. That packed a big punch to the gut. So very well done.
ReplyDeleteDon't mean to be punchin no guts...
DeleteThank you, lumdog!
Well done! The last line is a zinger. Very engaging!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Maggie!
DeleteWhat a beautiful piece-loved the last line-so full of emotion!
ReplyDeleteGlad for the love Atreyee! Thank you.
DeleteThe last line brings it home!
ReplyDeleteGlad you think so, Gina. Thanks!
Deletepoignant!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sandra.
DeleteA sudden sock to the gut for poor Mr. Parker. This was very well done!
ReplyDeleteI swear I'm not the violent type... Thank you, Tina!
DeleteA brilliant revelation of a different perspective. We all have our own filters.
ReplyDeleteIt's all the filters!
DeleteThank you so much, Kim! (and I like your name)
"Hell no we won't go" ... love geat use of the prompts Kymm :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the love, Sam!
DeleteWow. A dose of perspective, for certain.
ReplyDeletePerspective can only do so much...
DeleteThanks for reading, Cameron!
Can imagine when you feel that something so important is happening elsewhere and you are dealing with mundane issues.
ReplyDeleteOr when the important stuff surfaces in the midst of your mundanity.
DeleteThanks for reading, Sini!
Relativities. I loved this piece.
ReplyDeleteYes. Thank you for the love, Kelly!
ReplyDeleteI deal with this all the time. Known as an anti-war activist, yet shaking the hands of all vets and active-duty troops, thanking them for their service. My first sit-in was in high school. I knew some teachers had kids serving, and I NEVER spat on anyone coming back from Nam, because I thought they were the ones who had slogged through the mud and managed to survive. It's their bosses, the war profiteers, I always have a problem with.
ReplyDeleteYou captured, in 33 plus 3 words, a moment of awkwardness for the teacher. You nailed it, babe. Amy
Guess I touched a nerve, Amy! Thanks for the comment (and the praise).
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