Because I’m dead, she is letting my heels drag on the ground. When I was alive, she said: “I told you not to scuff those shoes. Just wait till your father gets home.”
33 words for
, in a quick and dirty free write.
[This is for Asunta Basterra]
, in a quick and dirty free write.[This is for Asunta Basterra]
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I googled the story you reference. You captured it in all it's lurid detail. Very nice.. writing that is, not the story.
ReplyDeleteUnfathomable, isn't it?
DeleteI'm so glad you could put 'lurid' and 'nice' in practically the same breath!
Thank you, Steph!!
They didn't deserve her. Your writing, however deserves much praise, Kymm. You brilliantly told this story in 33 words.
ReplyDeleteNo, they did not deserve her, you're right.
DeleteI don't know how much I deserve, Valerie, but your praise is well appreciated!!
Really powerful writing for a horrific situation, Kymm. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you, momo. Yes the story is a horrific one indeed.
DeletePoor Asunta... to many stories like this... why? There is one in Seattle right now... I'd like to drag some 'parents' heels. I like how you structured this, Kymm.
ReplyDeleteYes there are far too many stories like these.
DeleteI'm so glad to hear you appreciated the structure, Ted. Thank you!
Overwhelming, yes. A lawyer and a journalist.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Jo-Anne!
Powerful image.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Angie!
DeleteThis chilled me to the bone. And then I read the story behind it. Wow!
ReplyDeleteVery powerful piece on an absolutely tragic true tale.
Chilling is right. Hope you've warmed up!
DeleteThank you for the wow, Ivy!
Chilling. Both your words and the inspiration behind them. Beautifully written piece – you manage to capture all that horror in a handful of words.
ReplyDeleteYes, it is a lot of horror, isn't it.
DeleteThank you, Suzanne!
Truly well-done. And congrats on finishing the NaNoWriMo!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kylie!
DeleteAnd thanks for the NaNo congrats, too. Always fun.
Powerful writing Kymm-no idea why some parents come to this-they deserve to be shot dead!
ReplyDeleteIt's truly unfathomable.
DeleteThank you, Atreyee!
Love it! A wicked concept in such few words.
ReplyDeleteOhh, thanks for the love, Renada!
DeleteI found this oddly funny. Darkly humorous.
ReplyDeleteBagged.
DeleteHumor helps deal with horror.
Thanks, Draug!
I knew nothing of this story and like the others I found it chilling in how you captured the heart of her horror in such few words.
ReplyDeleteMaybe I shouldn't have mentioned her name, but I felt like I should. Like she needed it.
DeleteThanks, Glynis!
(I'm deleting the double entry.)
This is heartbreaking. I just read up on it. lovely way to put it down in words.
ReplyDeleteIt is devastating.
DeleteThank you so much, Yeshasvi!
This slays me. So good
ReplyDeleteThen slayed you be. hehe
DeleteThanks, Tri!