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Wednesday, November 19, 2014

Shelter

The deluge began in the foothills and quickly flooded the delta. Dolores left puddle prints as she slogged her way to the plains. She whistled her lips bone dry, sucked up the clouds of mystery. Stood barren before the one good man.


20 comments:

  1. Ooh, that last line! Very well done Kymm.

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    1. Thank you, Rachna! So glad you like it.

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  2. I second the love on the last line! Very nice, indeed.

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    1. Accepting all the love! Thank you, Jen!

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  3. I love this prose. Reminds me of Annie Proulx or Cormac McCarthy.

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    1. Thanks for the love, Josh! Been working on landscape lately : )

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  4. Love the visuals - can just see Delores slogging and leaving her puddle prints. Hope the one good man is worth the struggle.

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    1. Thanks for the love, Sarah Ann! So glad you can see it : )

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  5. Such evocative writing. You are good at this!

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    1. You are very kind. Thank you, Susan!

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  6. A very determined woman. This felt like a fable in a storybook. Beautifully done--again!

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    1. Oh, I love that it felt like that. Thank you, Tina!

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  7. This is a really great piece, Kymm. I hope she is not disappointed.

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    1. Oh, thank you, Thom! Might be a case of who disappoints who...

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  8. I agree - there is something fable-ish about this piece. Lovely details crafted in a creative way, especially "sucked up the clouds of mystery." Love that line.

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    1. Pleased about the fable-ish : ) Thanks for the love, SL!

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  9. Agree with the "fable-ish" feel. Emphasised by "Stood barren before one good man". It's almost biblical (in the best possible sense).

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  10. For some reason I could almost feel like my feet were sopping wet after reading this. LOL I know, I am weird! I loved the imagery you used. Brilliant. ♥

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    1. Glad you got your feet wet. Thanks for the love, Kathy!

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