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Friday, September 6, 2013

The Seventh Chakra


They were alone in the loft, the light fading. Someone had told her the soul leaves the body through the crown of the head. She spoke, her soft words his last tether, unraveling.


33 words for, including tether, crown and loft.


48 comments:

  1. I really like that last sentence, of the unraveling last tether.

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  2. Beautiful and tender. I see transcendence.

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    1. Thank you, LaTonya. Transcendence, surely.

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  3. Lovely poem and story. Well written, as usual.

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    1. You are lovely to say so. Thanks, lumdog!

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    1. Oooohh, lush. That's a nice word. Thanks, Paul!

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  5. Such a heartbreaking picture, but so beautiful.

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    1. Call me the heartbreak kid... Thank you, Tina!

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  6. Stunning work Kymm! Love how you used unraveling.

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    1. I know a bit about unraveling (in myriad nuances).
      Thank you, Suzanne!

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  7. Goosebumps all over, Kymm. I love this piece. So much.

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    1. Goosebumps - oh! Thanks for the love, Sandra!

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  8. Unraveling! This is lovely and sad at the same time. Love mixed emotions.

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    1. Unraveling : )
      I'm the queen of mixed emotions! Thank you, Gina!

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  9. I like this. It has an almost secret feeling to it.

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    1. Glad you like it. There is a bit of secrecy to it, isn't there?
      Thanks, Draug!

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  10. You used those 3 words well, Kymm.

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    1. Thank you, Ted!
      It's so great to see you back around these parts!!!

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  11. Oh, Kymm! This is beautiful. Tragic, but beautiful! Lovely work ... again. :)

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  12. This is a full sad story... love it.

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  13. oh Kymm,this is almost ethereal!Just loved it!

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    1. Ethereal... another word I like.
      Thanks for the love, Atreyee!

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  14. This is beautiful, and your use of the prompt words is so perfectly natural that I had to re-read it to find them at all. It all just works so well. Great job.

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    1. The height of a prompt compliment!!
      Glad you liked it. Thanks so much, Christine!

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  15. awesome

    This is one of my favorites. I love what you did with tether. great work

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    1. Such nice words. Glad you liked it, Lance. Thanks for the love!

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  16. How'd you make it sad yet still somehow uplifting and beautiful? Great job, Kymm. Thanks for linking up. Don't forget to vote.

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    1. I'm so glad that's the way it reads. Thank you, Tri!

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    1. Well, I'd just be the messenger...
      Thanks for the love, Aesop!

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  18. Such a great use of the word crown. And so beautifully written.

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    1. Glad you liked it. Thank you so much, Sarah!

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  19. Sometimes parchments long crap doesn't strike a string and sometimes merely 33 words hit the mark! wonderful to have read your post again.

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    1. Such a nice thing to say! Thank you, Habiba! And it's great to see you back, too!

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  20. I'd love to know the story behind this. Why is the poor guy dying? Unless....she's the one dying? Hm. Brilliant piece.

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    1. No, it's him. Death happens.
      Thanks, Michael!
      If you really truly want the back story: http://betterlies.blogspot.com.es/2009/04/poise-suspension.html

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  21. Wow! This is great! It's like you weren't even asked to incorporate the words, you just wrote a story and a good one too! :D

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    1. What a great compliment! Thank you, Linda!

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